Joel_Tempero

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If MistaTeas ends up putting that on a shirt I'll take 50.

I think I said this for another team similar to yours, don't ever change. For this competition to be fresh and exciting and enjoyable we need teams like yours that are willing to go the extra mile in 'Not giving any f***s whatsoever'. One day I myself hope to get an opportunity to do what you've done. I'm proud of you, and can't wait to see this film again.

Montages make me happy and you guys had a great montage, showing the passing of time for the lead and allowing us all to experience a little bit of his frustration while laughing along the way. Look forward to seeing more from you guys in years to come.

O_O

Wow.

You had everything going for you in this film except maybe the lighting, learn a little over the next year about how to light your scenes and colour them, if you do that I can guarantee you'll be topping the charts of this competition for a long time, amazing work guys.

I'm a bit of a VFX addict, so I spent a lot of time analysing the shots with the shadow man trying to figure out where the masking was to create these effects and tbh I'm still a little confused on how you did it so well done! You got me fooled. The ending wasn't particularly satisfying as it would have been nice to see something different happen, also wondered why the lights kept turning on?

You guys have some great skill, look forward to seeing what you can do next year.

Solid effort guys! As a duo team you pulled this off really well. I got a little bit lost at the end, probably need to watch it again to understand what happened, but I thought your story was solid the rest of the way through and you delivered your lines confidently which helped make it all quite convincing.

I reckon Jesus would have enjoyed this a lot actually.

Glad you guys had a lot of fun making this, we could tell!

Great story, brilliant one liners throughout. I could see where it was probably going to go as soon as one of them started talking about how it's just them three left, but was still pretty shocked when it went there.

You guys are awesome, have been for a number of years now, and it was great to see you make a film that you wanted to make and that even after being here for so many years you choose not to fall into any pressure to be the best (cause whenever a team does that they tend to end up not liking whatever they end up with). I hope you never leave the competition ever.

It's already been said, but I also wanted to say how much I appreciate musicals that really go for it in terms of making it MUSICAL. Even if you end up looking pretty silly, it's far more entertaining to see a team dedicate themselves to the genre which you guys clearly did and I'm so glad you did. Nice job!

Man I loved how committed you were in getting this couch from place to place, so awesome! Definitely more of an artistic film than one with a complete story, I was hoping the lady at the end would have smiled revealing some sort of odd gap in her teeth (But I understand that would have been pretty silly haha) This is an incredible effort as a first timer team, can't wait to see what you do in the future!

well, as the title points out, I was pretty confused!

Chances are you guys were maybe a bit rushed to get it in on time, understandable, but always remember to flick through your rendered product before you leave the house to make sure there's nothing crazy like audio 3 seconds out of sync. That's all I'll say as previous reviewers have already covered the rest, hope you guys are able to nail those glitches next year!

Truly clever way of tackling this genre, the script was brilliant, I tried really hard to see the wires and only caught a glimpse of something at one point so that was very well done.

Some great dialogue in here kept the pace up, thought the singing was pretty great but may have lingered on a little bit too long, liked the ending a lot and I thought the chemistry between the two leads was pretty natural which was refreshing to see.

I think this was quite creative and I thought the use of the green screen was interesting. There was a key element that I think left the whole film a little stuck - WHY was the day looping the way it was? did the character know about this? what influenced his decision in the final scene? These questions probably needed to be answered for the film to be fully whole.

I was pretty lost in terms of story but the fact that you had a giant murderous teddy bear sold it for me and I really loved that.

really impressive effort here considering you're a solo/duo team and you needed to come up with something with two characters. Was pretty odd, but I liked it a lot. Also thought you were super committed to go out into the water the way you did, added an extra layer of crazy, nice job guys!

This was a great idea, seemed to me like more of a metaphor than him literally changing, right? I'm pretty sure that's the point but forgive me if I missed something.

You guys really needed to have a lot of tension for this story to work, I'd say the biggest reducer of tension is wide shots, anything that has a character below the waist in multiple shots can make the tension quite loose and distant, make sure if you have to create more sense situations in the future that you pull in tight and get nice and close to the characters so that we can feel what they are feeling.

I really liked some of the lines from the new entry guy, very funny. Would have been a bit more engaged if you took the time to shoot the conversations from other angles.

This was such a great idea, when the ball managed to get into that room I laughed out loud man.

This could have been a lot more intense and funny if you took the time to get a few extra shots, particularly close ups of the characters faces, wide shots loose a lot of the tension that you wanted to create, remember that all the elements of film will drive the story forward, not just the story itself.

I really liked the story between the teachers and I wish the entire film was about this, it was your strongest idea and I would have liked to see the kids get incorporated better into that story then the song (the song was lovely but way too different in comparison to the rest of this film). The cinematography changed style a few times in this movie too, the best of it also being in the principals office, next year make sure you stick to one plot and style, and you should do great!!

Being the only animated film in ChCh I was super keen for this one, I liked the choice of style with the crayon drawings, the murders at the end completely blindsided me but later on I realised the foreshadowing was probably a bit more obvious than I noticed at the time. Solid effort considering your location and I hope this gets recognised in the solo/duo competition.

Unsure how I felt about this one, was pretty heavy to say the least. Wouldn't consider it enough to be in the musical genre, as you could have said it's just a splatstick** movie and would have made more sense. Committed acting was good however especially from the lady holding the chainsaw.

EDIT: **My mistake, it was monster movie, that actually does help it all make a little more sense.

I really really liked this one you guys have some great skills. Well shot, real slick editing, ended a little sooner than I would have liked cause I was really enjoying it.

Pacing was a little awkward and I struggled to understand what was happening by the end, I did like the pet element getting in the way of the task, reckon you guys needed to get some more lights in the room just so we could see a bit clearer what was going on, I've said it on a number of reviews now: The more light you have in the room the more control you can have over how it looks in the editing.

Clever idea here, you had some great ideas for making the two vloggers diverse, I would have loved to see more characters vlogging! Highlight was the shot up high when the body was still in the pool, lots of potential from this team can't wait to see what you produce in the future.

Anti-Romcom does have the 'com' in the title, this doesn't mean to say you need to have comedy the whole way through, but this film didn't seem to present much opportunity for that element due to the situation you put the leads.

Pretty sure your teachers let you write a story about something quite illegal, so I was pretty shocked, and struggled to get on board with the idea because of that, was the lead guy a real teacher at the school? I hope not.

Yo this one was slick, smooth ending, nice.

Quack.

Great idea here but execution fell a little flat, the story telling was all told from one angle, would have been good to see some different camera work to keep the pace up. Some funny ideas for the stories particularly the twins crossing the street, think you guys needed to show a bit more 'splat' in this to really stick to the genre, but overall a good effort from you guys.

I struggle to remember the details of the story too but I do remember loving the ending it was so absurd and I loved it.

Got a little lost in the details of this one but I enjoyed the commitment from the screaming guy in the room at the end, would have been good to see some close ups to raise the tension, wide shots make it difficult to feel what the characters are feeling cause they're too far away!

TheRealClose has already nailed on the head what I had to say about this one, your concept was really cool but I reckon it needed a bit more planning before you went out, remember to think about techniques of the camera, close ups create tension, long shots tend to ease the tension etc. You guys have been at this competition a few years now and I reckon you have potential to step up your game next year and really make a solid plan out of your idea.

Great idea which got a little lost in the amount of talking, nice twist although I didn't fully understand the twist until all those pictures at the end (mainly due to audio).

Wish I could say something about this film but I'll be honest I did turn my head for a moment and when I looked back it had finished.

Great to see a light, sweet, feel good movie that we could all relate to on an emotional level.

lol.

Loved the trumpet guy, made me laugh a lot, those little graphics representing the sound was very funny too.

Something that distracted me a little bit was the fact that your lead had been missing for 15 years when he looked 14, just a thought for next year, unless you can make it super convincing that they're old, it's best to just stick with your strengths (which in your guys case is the fact that you're young, make sure you use that!)

Strong start here but tapered off a fair bit by the end, mainly due to not being able to hear things very well I'd say, I reckon you guys probably knew exactly what was going on, it's a common trap especially when you only have 5 minutes to get the story across to fill in the blanks yourself and forget that audience doesn't have those blanks to work with. You guys have heaps of potential so keep it up!

wAS tHaT MiDdlETon gRAngE SChOoL?

Freaking love you guys, clever and well paced the entire way through, great makeup, great dialogue, great great great.

UPDATE:

So the finals are over now and I felt compelled to say a little more now that I've seen this one on the big screen, I have to say I feel like I enjoyed it even more this time. Because I knew what was coming in terms of story, I focused more on the technical elements, and I just wanted you guys to know that I really thought it was stunning, particularly your editing, but also your techniques when shooting characters from far away - and it's just hit me now why I loved this so much, Modern Family. I binged every episode of that show over about 2 weeks, and you guys have nailed that style down in this film so well.

So yea, again, thanks for your awesomeness, can't wait to see what you do next year.

Bit unsure what to say about the story here as I'm still trying to figure out what it was all about, what I will say tho is I loved the aspect ratio, the grading and the framing of your actor, you guys have great style.

You guys had some great stuff in here and I thought the twist at the end was pretty neat (you had me wondering the whole way through how your robbery was going to impact the start).

A comment about the scene where the camera was going around the three leads, the more light you have in your scene the more control you can have over the look later on, the low light made this shot stand out like a sore thumb compared to the rest of the film.

This was very very sweet, and I loved seeing all those animals! You guys are awesome, keep it up!

You guys had some freaking great lines yo I was SHOOK. Great effects with the guts, highlight was probably the baby falling into the river.

You guys won best school team last year right? (EDIT: I was mistaken, I must have heard about your guys film another way). Man you guys are a force to be reckoned with and I can't wait to see what you guys do in the future.

I think you're idea here was really powerful.

I also think - this film was a little unbalanced, and became an advocacy video a bit too quickly for the audience to feel the impact. The spoken word was great, but could have easily been incorporated into the story by just getting him to talk to some mates at a bar or something, the stats were good but not right bang in the middle of the film without any context to go off of, too much of a shock for us to really appreciate the art form.

That being said, it was very artistic and passionate, and I'm proud of you guys for being bold in choosing to create something that can easily have a big impact on somebody else, it would be good in the future to find that balance a little better if you plan on doing something like this again.

LOVED your team intro.

Great design for a tree monster, however leading up to it seemed a little unbalanced, lots of the couple together and then the last 30 seconds BOOM MONSTER SCARY and then sudden ending, maybe that was your plan all along in which I say well done haha.

Great in concept, a bit confusing in execution.

I didn't know who the time travelling lady was until the credits rolled and it said 'future mother', needed to be a bit more obvious.
The lines in the song were good, but the performance was rushed and sadly a lot of it was out of time with the song, making it quite distracting.

Still a very good effort tackling such a difficult genre, well done!

There was a lot going for you guys here, you had some solid dialogue particularly the lead was pretty strong. The whole way through I had a prediction that the 'monster' was the lead guy, metaphorically speaking, like he was being a monster to all these women and I thought that's where it was going to end up, so the ending got me haha, nice job guys.

I went to vote for you guys at my #1 spot and was gutted to see your film not on the list :( Would have loved to see you guys make finals, can't wait to see what you guys make next year!

Sooooooo cute man this one made me so happy. Great costumes, great visual effects that reflected the style really well. I see a TV series brewing!

Stunner performances from all the actors in this film. Fantastic location seemed like a legit film set.

My only question is why the robot lady bled. Is it like a Doctor Who cyberman type thing where she's upgraded enough to bleed? haha, easy to overlook that question when you see the full picture of this film though, loved it.

This was hard core man super impressive to pull all of this off in only 2 days. Babies are awesome.

You guys had a really strong idea and it was well shot for the most part. Thought the bath scene was really impressive, and had a good ending shot. I would have liked to see some more close ups during the looking forward sequence to see the leads face better and draw out a bit more of that emotion, but overall a solid effort from this team, well done!

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You had a great start to this with the first round and seeing how they all break in, but after that it started to fall a little flat, and I couldn't even see what went on in the final round, so overall a great idea that needed to really finish strong for it to work, keep it up guys! see you next year.

Love love loveeeed this film. This is the most anti-romcom I've seen so far (and I had to make one myself this year haha).

We've had a lot of documentary type films this year and you guys have nailed that better than everyone I've seen so far. Some great dialogue and thought your commitment to the bunker set was great - particularly enjoyed that spit bucket, need to get myself one of those.

Hey I liked your take on this genre! Some of the things that happened seemed to not have much relevance to the plot (the conversation between the two guys? Maybe it was and I just didn't pick up on it). You had some good shots particularly in the office scene, best tip for next year is to keep the pace up, look at each shot individually to see if you can shave off frames at the start and the end, it helps tighten up your story and gives you room to add in things you may think you can't.

Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes.

This was a solid attempt at a difficult genre, good use of camera angles to disguise the reveal of what the mother looks like, the suicide felt a bit OTT considering how happy it seemed at the start, would have liked to see maybe the mother change her mind after remembering her past and reconciling with her daughter, but overall liked where you went with it, nice job!

This one made me very happy. Loved the note at the end.

I would have liked to see a montage of different murder attempts just to get the point across (and the humour) of how many times the lead tried to murder her friend.

You guys have some great ideas I can't wait to see what you come up with next year.

I liked the vlog style but sadly the thing which distracted me was the fact that this girl had $10,000 and didn't seem to use it for anything, I think it would have been a lot more complete if you dropped that line, and it would have made a lot more sense why she was just simply enjoying her day where she was instead of going to Hawaii or Disneyland lol

Also there seemed to be an unresolved conflict with that other guy? bit confused, maybe you just ran out of time to get that part working, keep it up guys looking forward to next year.

Had some great gags in here which made me laugh, but I didn't really know what was happening until the end when you started talking about money, make sure you create enough room so that your story can be clear while including all the funny bits!

Last year my film was a movie called 'A Ripple in Time' so when this showed up I started to squirm a little haha.

You had a great idea although I think was a little crowded at the end with the uno thing not making complete sense and then ending rather quickly afterwards. Also wanted to suggest in the future you don't put your camera on low angles up against a fully white sky, it's quite distracting to have this huge amount of white behind the actors, it's better to shoot face on to get some of those lovely trees :)

Really strong start which sorta fell a little flat at the end, that tends to happen a lot in this competition. Impressive effects, reckon the iphone shot was okay but might have been better if you just strapped on your camera for that. Lots of promise from this team I look forward to seeing what you guys make in the future!

Hey nice job hornby, your school has been at this competition again and again I'm glad to see you guys sticking at it and enjoying the weekend. You clearly had a solid idea in your guys heads, I could tell from your performance that this story made a lot of sense to you guys. Sadly I think you didn't pay enough attention to some of the things that distracted us from that story eg. the boom mic dropping into frame, also wish we could have had another shot of who the science lady was talking to etc. All good learning things for next year, keep at it guys!

You had a very interesting story here, the jacket on the coat hanger completely blindsided me so well done on that. Main thing I can remember needing work was the sound, volume was a little erratic and distracting, solid effort overall!

This film was incredibly relatable.

Okay so not really, but it was a lot of fun! You had some great editing moments in this which brought the story along quite nicely, my only critique would be the start of the film lingered on a bit too long with your leads getting ready, would have been good to see more of the main plot of him running around trying to find the girl then spending time at the house getting ready for something which goes by rather quickly.

BOYS.

^ Loved that.

I'm not sure whether you planned to create a comedy, but I thought it was very funny, I loved how you left some shots to linger on to reveal the lead getting chased etc. I think that's where your balance was thrown off a little, trying to find that line between humour and serious message can be tough, keep at it guys!

Yay drones!

Good concept however required some set dialogue for it to work on screen, was pretty clear that the lines were improv which is difficult to pull off when the shots don't cut to anything else, give yourself a chance to re-shoot things a few times before you leave location, the more content you can work with in post the slicker your film will turn out.

Truthfully I can't identify much of a difference between the songs you wrote for this film and todays most famous mumble rappers.

Thought it was neat how you got to go to some cool locations.

A bit too much writing at the end summing everything up, give the audience time to take in the ending.

Loved your team intro :P

This film had a great start, although I'm guessing based on the DQ you guys may have been running out of time and had to cut it short? gutted.

Well written, and was beautifully shot.

The genre is a film that spans more than 10 years, I understood that it's likely the note was written 10 years prior, it would have been good to see that play out a bit more obviously, maybe you could have had the jacket passed on from person to person to show the passing of time even more obviously?

You guys are insane.

You did a really good job at convincing me you were tearing each other apart, man that was impressive. A bit hard to hear the dialogue at times, but I don't actually think that matters too much considering how nuts you were all behaving, loved it.

Nice little twisting of the genre, making it the last day for one character who is leaving, liked that. I also noticed the writing on your the leads hand can be seen in the bathroom before he goes to work. It's already been said but the check boxes changing throughout the film was pretty distracting, still a very good effort guys!

I also like yoghurt.

Some good gags in this film, some advice for when you want low light is to start brighter and then darken it in post, the more light you have to work with the more control you can have over it later on, would have helped in the ritual scene to see you guys a bit clearer.

It was great to see how well you used Ara without making it super obvious that it was Ara. That's not easy to pull off, but you guys did that really well. A little lost at the end but thought it was still very sweet how it ended on a nice colourful shot.

I loved how you handfisted the plot conveniences on us but then flipped it on it's head and left us with a tragedy my goodness I loved that. Great makeup aswell!

While there were some distractions with how it was edited and the sound being a bit all over the place, I have to say so far you guys are truly the closest I've seen to a splatstick film. Assuming this genre is suppose to carry similar elements to slapstick, ideally you would have a lot of goofs and gags creating more and more issues along the way and they'd be super obvious, you guys are the first team so far to really nail that, so well done!

I loved this but at the end I was pretty confused cause I was waiting for a child to come onto screen or like a cat or something but I've just had the revelation after reading these reviews that it was the AI, the picture book and everything omgoshh that got me!! Well freaking done.

wwooooooowwwww you're dog is so well behaved!! It yawned, it typed, it turned on your camera, truly fantastic. Man that was awesome.

My favourite film from the entire night. Truly brilliant way of incorporating Ultra, also loved how it pointed out some of the things I'm sure the audience was thinking and addressed them. I thought it was amazing how even though using a baby can create limits, you were able to break those limits in such a creative way, using first person shots, voice over etc. Can't wait to see this one again (at reading cinemas June 14th get your tickets noooowwwww :P )

*sees a classroom with a couple of kids* okay so we're gonna get some sort of basic awkward romance or something...
*sees everybody freeze* Oh boy oh boy here we go kiddies show me whatcha got.

Some good lines of dialogue here (skin...her skin). The ending could have been a little more polished than 'She cheats and you could do better' but I like where you went with it overall, nice job!

Very impressive to get the shots you did at night, night movies are always a challenge to pull off. It's already been said here, the intensity overall probably needed to go up a bit more at the end, and I'd also add that the beginning when they're walking into the forest seemed to linger on a bit too long, but still a very solid effort from you guys.

I've been a fan of you guys ever since my little high school self ended up in an adult heat watching some dude try and fight off a giant bread man in his head, and since then you've never disappointed me. Once again nailing your style down, fantastic songs, and would have been a real shock for those who have never seen one of your films before, brilliant.

You guys had a great concept, struggled a little to get some of the details due to the sound and sometimes lack of visuals. I think you bent the rules of your story a little which confused me, with Satan first saying 'get me a soul' and then at the end saying 'get me a soul but not that soul I don't like that specific soul' haha, maybe I missed something.

Glad to see so many teams from Motion Design taking on this competition, keep at it guys!

The thing that stood out in this film was how the radio started to communicate directly with the lead, I liked that a lot. Besides that, I found myself a little lost in the other elements of the story, but I'm sure you guys knew what was happening and just struggled to get that across in the time limit. Keep at it team! Lots of promise here.

I'm probably a little biased here :P but I did really enjoy what you guys were able to put together. Talking to you guys after the heat helped me understand a bit better what was going on, it's pretty obvious the biggest thing which I reckon would have helped the story make sense is if you got a close up of the guy sitting on the floor, revealing that what he was drawing was the same symbol as that of the lead. With that in mind, I think you guys did a great job.

I liked this film a lot for what it is. It's definitely an anti-romance movie, with the sad ending etc. Seemed to be missing the element of comedy a bit, which understandably is the hardest part of this genre.

This film left me with a few questions like 'Where is he now' and 'maybe they're somewhere in the future and are the last two people on earth' etc. and I don't want to know the answers to these cause the best thing about this film was the mystery and subtleness, nice job guys.

It was awesome to see multiple languages in this film. It was well shot and lit, I for one thought the painting was quite nice! haha

Loved loved looooved this, truly brilliant concept. Fell a little flat at the end, one more gag of somebody getting hurt would have probably been better than the outcome, but still very enjoyable overall, fantastic job guys.

This film looked really really good, some of the audio let it down a little bit as I couldn't actually hear the conversation between actors that well and missed the reason that the cat was taken away. Besides that though, it was a great shot at a difficult task. Well Done!

This film had a lot of promise but fell a little flat on the 'thriller' side, becoming more of a tragedy film than a tense one. Strong performances from the leads kept it in tack however which was really good.

NEXT YEAR: It's already been said make sure you don't bite off more than you can chew, and I'd also add some of the audio needed to be balanced a bit better particularly the audio coming from the TV.

Glad to have seen this one even if it was DQ'd, it was strong the whole way through, the highlight being the silhouette scene. Also thought the music was used well. Only question I had was how did your protagonist go from not knowing a lot about witches to performing a satanic ritual haha, that being said great performance as always Derian, hope to see more from you guys in the future.

You had some great character contrasts in here which helped moved the story along nicely. I did enjoy the twist at the end although I think you could have pushed the actual crime a bit further to really show the silliness of the twist (eg. maybe instead of something being stolen it could have been i dunno...triple homiside or something)

Duuuuuudeeee this one hit me haaarddd man I thought last year you guys did incredible but this one just topped that another punch straight to the gut I LOVED it. Beautiful shots, beautiful dialogue, BEAUTIFUL take on the genre.

Can't wait to see this one again at reading cinemas June 14th buy your tickets now ;)

Bloody brilliant, all I have to say.

NEXT YEAR: okay for real, don't ever change. We NEED teams like you guys, while you may not realise it, there will be people who see what you've done and be inspired < I'm not kidding. Inspired to have fun, and put the fun of the weekend before anything else, that's absolutely the most important thing.

Man this was brave, I'm loving these films that choose to tackle head on real world issues. It was well written, left me questioning for most of the film who the girl was talking to, I'm glad you didn't reveal death in full focus. Regardless of how this film does in the competition, be proud knowing that you've created something that truly does have potential to inspire or encourage a person who may struggle with mental health similar to this.

My only suggestion for improvement that I noticed was the voice of death, it seemed like you wanted death to be quite mysterious and abstract, modifying the voice to be lower in tone, and more echoey would have probably brought that character more to life.

This was special, a great take on a difficult genre. Great delivery of the lines, well written and very touching. And my critique has already been said twice above, I enjoyed how subtle this film was the whole way through until that date showed up haha, easy to overlook that when you're reviewing the film as a whole though, well done guys!

This film was a lot of fun, I'm glad you didn't take this genre too seriously. Had some great lines in there.

NEXT YEAR: Felt like this year you had two plots, one of the two guys and another of the old lady accidentally killing everyone, while both a great, make the most of your 5 minutes by just picking your favourite storyline and sticking with that the whole way through.

This one was a bit tricky to follow but some stand out moments was the shot of the door outside and also the fact that you guys were committed to filling your shopping trollies the way you did, loved that.

NEXT YEAR: Something that I'm still learning when making these films is sometimes we can get so caught up in our idea that it ends up only making sense to the people who made it, I've made that mistake a few times now, this may not apply to you guys directly but it is certainly a good piece of knowledge I thought I'd pass on, make sure your film stands on it's own two feet without having to lean on any understanding you have of it in your head, and that way it'll thrive :) Well done guys! Good luck next year.

Acting was on point in this one, really committed to what your character was feeling. Also really liked the passing of time on the couch. Also - ever watched phineas and ferb? this film reminded me of balloony haha

NEXT YEAR: Continue to practice your cinematography skills, it's really easy when you're under pressure to go with the basics, but if you can break out of that then it adds another layer of excellence to your work.

I liked the concept and I thought the strongest part of your film was when one of your characters was going over the plan, that was well edited and got a good amount of audience laughs.

NEXT YEAR: Bit noisy, make sure you make some time to level that out, sound can make or break a film!

*sigh* if only I could also go back and redo a few of the silly decisions I made in high school :')

Cute little story, overall solid performances from all your actors. Maybe it's just my love for edgar wright, but I reckon you guys could have benefited with some sort of montage, suggesting that maybe it took him more than 3 times to get it right, montages are a great way for showing passing of time without lingering on details too much.

Well done guys.

Good idea that started off pretty strong, I enjoyed a few of the lines from the kids sitting around I thought they were quite funny.

NEXT YEAR: seemed like maybe you guys were a little pushed for time this year, with there being a lack of ending and also a very clear ACTION which while I really enjoyed hearing I'm sure you didn't intend to have there, I'm sure I don't need to tell you guys how to manage your time better as you usually know how to do that by the end of the weekend, and it's different for every team.

Man you guys had a great story, especially the ending I thought that was quite strong. Also really enjoyed the duck, thought that was a good little world builder for you guys.

NEXT YEAR: Continue to work on your camera skills and sound, some shots were good for the teleportation scenes, but during the conversation it would have done you justice to push the limits of what you were shooting into more interesting angles etc.

Keep up the great work team, see you next year.

OH! before I forget - I LOVED your team intro hahahaha

You guys had me laughing every time I saw an old VHS cable wrapped around somebodies face :')

NEXT YEAR: you had a solid story right up until the end when (I'm guessing and forgive me if I'm wrong) you needed to quickly wrap it up so short cut to something that seemed a little odd. The ending of a film is your home run swing, so be bold! swing hard!

Clever idea - making the genie and wisher unable to communicate, I liked that. I'm also glad that you didn't resolve the story and have things work out for the wisher, you stuck with the joke till the end, well done.

NEXT YEAR: I think you guys needed a bit more light in that room! difficult to see some parts. The more light you have the more control you can have in making it clear for the audience. This film could have probably been done in any location and still worked.

hahahahahahahahahahahahahaha. This film made me happy.

Loved you guys, clever camera angles gave you some good opportunities for gags - LOVED the shot where Cousin Jimmy is outside doing his business while the other two were inside talking.

NEXT YEAR: tighten up your dialogue a little bit, seemed like at a few points you were unsure what you were suppose to be saying, confidence in what you're saying is key!

The dialogue in this film was OUTSTANDING. Maybe I'm a sucker for poetry, but my gosh was I impressed with the script for this film. Even though the ending may have fell a little flat, you have everything else going for you in this film, it's well lit and styled, the audio was one of the clearest of the entire night, such a great take on the genre.

NEXT YEAR: For a film like this, this isn't so much a critique as it is just an idea, some light piano music could have added to the creepiness possibly? You'd have to add it in to know for sure. Silence is useful but can sometimes get uncomfortable if overused, and music is a great element for pushing the story forward.

I'm excited to see what you guys create in the future ;)

Haha, it would appear that most of my feedback for you guys has already been said above.

instead of me making you re-read things what I'll add to this is I liked your twist in the end, but I would have liked to see it come back to how you began with your interview footage (or maybe you did and I can't remember?), it's always good to bring it back to it's roots if you can, and because you started with the interviews it would have been a clever idea to try and present the twist in that format too.

Proud of you guys for looking beyond a typical zombie movie and coming up with a unique way of showing a back from the dead genre, you had some great goofs that made me laugh.

NEXT YEAR: Comedy is difficult, and the laughing track was a good way of adding some comedy - however, it's always a good idea to watch your film without the laugh track to see if it still stands on it's feet, if it does, then congrats! If not, then chances are you'll get a better film by tightening up the edit instead of leaving room for the laughter.

Also, forgot to say on your other school teams review - nice team names, very clever ;)

Musical is well known for being the big bad wolf of 48 and is often joked about being super terrifying (or maybe that isn't a joke at all), and I thought you guys took this genre and made the most of it considering your circumstances (having to do your film at school). A solid commitment from your lead (had his head in the game amiright? ) especially in the first scene really brought the film to life. I also LOVED the lyrics being played like a sing-along, a classic trope of a disney styled musical which was a great idea for a musical of this style. Overall I was very impressed with how your team didn't cower away from the genre and gave it a good go.

NEXT YEAR: Pacing is always a tricky thing to balance, especially in a musical, but ultimately it'll come down to your editing. It's always good to go through each shot and see how much you can trim on each side without loosing any information, keep practicing guys you've all got heaps of potential for years to come!!