A fantastic demonstration of special effects ability. It was by far the best visual effects we've seen in Dunedin 48Hours this year.
Particularly well done was the tidy inclusion of the bent wire in the form of the headphones.
To say the audience was impressed by your short would be an understatement.
While visually impressive, the overly nasal narration of this film was rather lackluster. The insertion of the compulsory line also suffered from poor delivery by your lead. Considering the dearth of dialogue, it was important that you got these right, and you didn't quite nail it.
Compositing was varied - and was particularly rough at the start with massive colour variance between your actress and the rest of the scene. Not quite the seamless approach you needed.
As a technical demonstration, it went well. As a narrative, it was simply insufficient.
WRITE. Shoot. Cut. Survive.