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Pros:
Some nice lights towards the end when your scene was really ramping up.

You tried a bold concept and attempted to incorporate at least some of your elements in an interesting way.

Cons:
A music video is not a musical. Unless of course you are trying to pass this off as dance, in which case you missed the dance genre too.

No characters, no plot, no tension, no reason to stay interested.

Pros:
A fantastic demonstration of special effects ability. It was by far the best visual effects we've seen in Dunedin 48Hours this year.

Particularly well done was the tidy inclusion of the bent wire in the form of the headphones.

To say the audience was impressed by your short would be an understatement.

Cons:
While visually impressive, the overly nasal narration of this film was rather lackluster. The insertion of the compulsory line also suffered from poor delivery by your lead. Considering the dearth of dialogue, it was important that you got these right, and you didn't quite nail it.

Compositing was varied - and was particularly rough at the start with massive colour variance between your actress and the rest of the scene. Not quite the seamless approach you needed.

As a technical demonstration, it went well. As a narrative, it was simply insufficient.

WRITE. Shoot. Cut. Survive.

Pros:
Yep, we laughed. Kudos to velvet burger guy and girl for going the extra mile.

Cons:
The film was about as intelligent as the team's name.

But if I wanted to go in to specifics: Your narrative was ill conceived and lazy. Making a 48Hours film about making a 48Hours film is the concept that every other team jokes about. They joke because it is a cop out.

Learn what an establishing shot is.

If you really want to improve, learn what an axis of action is.

If you have dialogue about why it is important to use a tripod:
1) Use a tripod
2) It has just brought attention to your own cameraman. You might want to make sure he isn't casting a massive shadow across your scene.

Pros:
Some funny moments, and it looked like you guys had a good time. The freezeframe was exactly what it needed to be: mindless but funny. Your business casual/smart formal/smart casual joke was a great thing to run with.

Cons:
We can still hear the director giving you instructions. Some minor audio issues. Get your actors to speak up!

Pros:
I really liked your use of picture in picture to demonstrate the simultanaeous conversations and an appropriate technique for shot-reverse-shot in an online context. I can imagine your lead actually having her own vlog too.

Cons:
I felt that your on screen graphics were a tad basic considering the digital environment you were otherwise convincingly able to convey. And your 'twist' ending was visible a mile away (even if we secretly hoped we were wrong).

Cell phone ring tones: get some less annoying ones.

Pros:
Great dialogue, audio and very pretty paper craft animation. Emotional story which kept the audience glued. The clapping was delayed as the audience wanted to make sure they didn't miss a thing.

Cons:
The compulsory line of dialogue felt really clunky - sad considering the otherwise tight narrative.

A potentially risky move tackling an earthquake story? We'll see how it plays out.

Pros:
Marketing gurus who don't understand their product was an ingenious idea. Your use of the Japanese advertising produced a strong response from the audience based on the flashing lights and audio alone. A great technique - let the audience fill in the blanks.

Good job with the smoke machine and lighting at the end.

Cons:
While the concept was interesting, I feel it didn't hold up for as long as you played it out. You needed a few more angles during your desk scenes, it lacked variety.

Pros:
Some funny dialogue and a nice pastiche of the reality TV genre. They clearly understand all of the reality TV tropes. Delivery of lines was pretty good.

Cons:
Uninteresting use of locations - you have all the road in the world and you got those shots? We didn't care about any of your characters until the very end (and even then only one of them had significant screentime - the other was your cameraman).

Your use of compulsory character could have gone somewhere but fizzled. I think you had a missed opportunity with his bullied younger brother. Reality TV is based on drama, and you let an obvious confrontation go.

Pros:
I can see there was so much more to this, and I keep trying to fill in the blanks. The actors visual performance was convincing.

Cons:
Terrible audio means that we only have a loose idea of the story, and didn't get a chance to experience the actors performances. A real shame as it looked like it had a real story behind it.

A dialogue heavy film where you can't hear the dialogue. Ouch.

Pros:
Nice sets and I will salute anyone who does claymation in 48 hours. What an effort. The bullying quit line was also an interesting concept. The audience laughed in the right places.

Cons:
A little but jumpy in places (image wise). I thought you had wrapped up the story nicely by killing the boss, but you brought him back for the ending. This actually undid a key element of your story - that the boss disappeared.

Pros:
Solid acting from the lead male, which held the whole thing together. The story was convincing and entertaining, even if it didn't sit well with the genre.

Cons:
Swing as a fad - you're stretching the concept a bit there. Camera lost focus a few times, particularly outside at night. Delivery from groom was variable.

Pros:
The film looked and sounded great. It also had a cast who could act - lines of dialogue you could actually hear! Good gags had the crowd responding - not surprised they got the audience award.

Add to this some bloody solid camera movement and you've got a great short.

Cons:
The newspaper exposition was a little fast. It took a while to figure out who was who until the end.

Pros:

The final sequence looked really good, and I believed the solid 'thunk' when they were hacking just out of the camera's vision.

Cons:

I'm not going to rag on this too much, but bad green screen and an incongruous ending do not make for a good film.

Pros:
Nice use of dramatic shadow early on. With the exception of a few later night shots, it was filmed very well. Audio was clear and well presented.

A really solid short.

Cons:
The ending felt rushed. With a solid lead up this one gag wonder left us wanting more. Was that what they were going for?

Some (but only some) of the night shots were terrible.

Pros:
The boss bad guy could deliver his lines clearly, even if he did ham it up a bit too much. The doomsday device was nice.

Cons:
Poor editing and shooting angles in the final office sequence leads us to some awful jump cuts. I had absolutely no idea what Bobby Young was saying.

Pros:
Really quite funny for the majority of the film. Good sight gags. The fly driving the car was excellent, and featured nice use of the prop.

Cons:
Use of compulsory character was lame. Completely pointless water and underwater shots which detracted from your narrative. If they were funny they could at least be excused, but they didn't even add much in the way of comedy.

Pros:
Great Depth of Field use in some parts of the movie. Some good gags, and it got a strong crowd response. Nice use of couch burning to give a local flavour.

Cons: Terribly out of focus in other parts of the movie.

The boom showed up in shot a few times. I think some of these were intentional, but got the impression that this wasn't always the case. Pretty average audio made some dialogue difficult to follow.

Pros:
Nice concept, mostly great cuts. I really liked the use of real world sounds to build your soundscape, and cutting between them gave the short great pace.

One of the more enjoyable offerings of the night.

Cons:
Some of the cuts got out of time with your beat by the end.

Terrible auto-tune made many of the lines incomprehensible. I don't know how Booby Young was portrayed as an ex-bully, but have assumed I missed it somewhere in the auto-tuned bleating.

If I really want to get picky, I'd argue that this didn't really portray any of the genre tropes of musical or dance (other than featuring a bit of each). This was more a music video.

Pros:
Very cool sets and props throughout. Fantastic blood effects. I really liked the surgical procedure being shown on the screen behind. The use of the wire actually fit the story.

Cons:
I guess the story didn't really grip me. If they didn't have the great props and well dressed sets I think my mind would have wandered. In the end I had no real reason to care about any of the characters.