Some nice editing and transitions in this short. Nice use of graphic overlays. I thought there was too much headroom in interviews and I would have benefited from better composition. Nice use of the stills throughout. I felt the story was very similar to “The Wham Initiative” by The Gentlemen’s Agreement a couple of years back, but not done as well as that short. It was very cliché and a bit too predictable. Interviewer audio level was too loud. An amusing film with some aspects done well. A few laughs throughout at times, but not enough.
It droned on a little bit, and the story was a little excessive. There was not enough 'rock' and to much 'umentery' in this. But it was a very good film, and could have been funnier if you guys reached to the 'incident' a little sooner. Quite a good film, all in all.
A lot of fun for the first half, but after a while it outstayed its welcome.
What I liked: Nicely shot, and I think at it's core it had a cool storyline. (reminded me of the drummers from THIS IS SPINAL TAP)
What to work on for next year: Unfortunately because this short suffered from poor audio/mix I found was very hard to hear and follow the storyline.
There were some sound issues so I lost some of the dialog, and the plot drifted a little in the middle. However, it was well filmed with a clear rockumentary style and some great one liners meant that overall it was an enjoyable watch.
In rockumentary style this is the story of the break-up of the minimally successful band, Lost & Collected.
Although they were overdone, the close-ups of guitars, equipment and other rock band stuff looked great. Stills were used well with Ken Burns effects deployed with good results. The doco structure was followed with all the typical conventions you'd expect. However, the story really didn't progress as it should and the film lacked any real punch. The conflict I think with this genre is do you play it straight or go for comedy. Most choose the latter as did the team here (I think) but you really have to sustain it and not launch into the absurd. A distraction during the interview scenes was the booming voice of the interviewer which had obviously been recorded in post, and seemed tacked on. Better to not have an interviewer at all, and let your subjects tell the story.
A regular CHCH participant so good to see you in again!
Good effort team. You did try seriously to make a rockumentary and ill give you credit for that. Its a hard genre to nail and you are on the correct path.
As already noted, audio noise was your biggest downfall and you have noted that so thats good. I find that one way to address the issue is to have decent speakers/headphones for the editor, that way you hear the issues in post production and not until the film is shown on the big screen.
Story - well you had one but it wasn't great. Think quirky characters, ones that don't fit the mold for this genre. They come across better as underdogs/funny.
Hope to see you improve for next year.
Good to see Awkward Spark again and good to hear their film open with a sweet live bass line. (Good work there, music person.) This is a VH1 Behind the Music style look at a successful band, the kind of thing where people are always"coming off a real rough period" and saying things like "He was our guitar technician for the first incarnation of the band". Harper Harrison is one of the two remaining members of the band after a steady reduction in band numbers (most previous band participants seemingly having died in mysterious circumstances), and provides a bit of foreground and background comedy via the sort of "idiotic" interpretation of thoughtless, including an amusing bread-beating at one point.
There were some attempts here to tell the background/subtext story within the wider context of the documentary format I think, but these didn't seem to quite come together, and just when they reached a more intriguing point, the film suddenly ended. This was sort of symptomatic of the film overall, which I think felt a bit bits-and-piecesy, never quite finding (or perhaps never quite clearly presenting) its through line or story. Good nods to a lot of the rocumentary style film making techniques though, and some funny moments.